Tuesday, October 13, 2009

the Break Up


Gone are those days when we sat aside,

Chatting on every shit, wrong or right.

I use to listen to your silly jokes,

Gosh! they were pathetic but I still explode.



I always loved the way you smile

Dress my hair, touch my eyes.

Every moment seems to be so true so real,

But perhaps, you never felt the way I feel.



Eventually, life took a big u-turn,

Left now at the countryside, alone to burn

Made many mistakes, for that I am blue,

I have never been perfect but neither have you.



You never negotiate, cared my suggestion,

You always said, it’s your life, it’s your possession,

I tried hard to bring things back,

But train once derailed is never again on track.



One day, surely I will erase the memories away,

Or else it will haunt me like everyday,

Stuck in the past that continues to call,

Separated we stand baby, united we fall

22 comments:

Karthik said...

It's very nice, dude. But frankly I like your prose more than your poems.. Keep 'em coming.. :)

Nανєєη said...

In ur second last line u meant to write "struck" or "stuck" ??


anyways gud one :)

Unknown said...

Hi,,vineeth... thanks for commenting on my blog.. A very nice poem... I really do felt the same when I broke up.. A very good comment.. please do visit my blog..whenever you could afford sometime..

Tanima said...

Beautifully expressed...

Anonymous said...

GOOD JOB, KEEP IT UP

Sri Valli said...

Very Nice poem....=]*

Keep Writing :)

sajin said...

Nice One....

Unknown said...

nice one...

the end's really good

Anoop said...

heyyy nice poem,...

angel from heaven said...

Nice poem well written.

Nethra said...

It is very beautiful, but did you really laugh at her every PJ? hehehe :)

VeeKay said...

absolutely awesum..:) if its ttrue i hope u patch up..if its just out of imagination..kudos for ur poetry..:)

jayesh said...

U ROCK DUDE !!! GR8 POEM .....
IT TOUCHED MY HEART ....
JUST MY LIFE
AWSOME DUDE ...
KEEP ON WORKING LIKE THIS

Pratik said...

very touchy.

Unknown said...

Lovely, Very lovely.. Especially the last line.. Touching to the very 'core'.. :-)

Ritika said...

sensitive..
obviously touching... very very connective..!!

Teeteekay said...

lol :D
hilarious..
loved the last line :)

angel from heaven said...

Well thought out and scripted.

●๋•guℓѕнαn●๋•™ said...

A great read..specially the last line ...can so relate to it...dun mind..i just copied teh last stanza for my gtalk status..hope ya dun mind :)

vineet said...

@ all: trust me its just a sheer piece of imagination, nothn as such or me behind it,people do love dese kidan posts so came up.nyhow thns every1 n till today its ma best poem coz aftr writing this poem i was fascinated 2 write more n ultimately screw it up

Avi said...

"train once derailed is never again on track" was good !!

Unknown said...

touching....senti senti thi thodi...trn 1nc derailedis nvr back on track...
last line toh sabse pelu thi...
gud work sir